These 2 are mine:
"He lost himself inside my head,
amongst dreams i could not follow,
the inner child i thought was dead;
hope to see him tomorrow. "
and you know this one has happened to you:
"Flushed away to another world,
drowning in the toilet swirl,
words of wisdom i should have known:
miss the call or lose the phone!"
Okay, here is the Hugh Mearn's classic that inspired it all ( for me, at least):
"As i was walking up the stair,
i met a man who wasn't there,
he wasn't there again today,
i wish, i wish he'd go away."
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"drowning with the toilet swirl.." brilliant! "miss the call or lose the phone" (without the exclaimation mark) i like this.
"he lost himself inside my head" that's some haunting line.
many wonderful lines here. as a whole they don't quite yet come together. that's my opinion anyway. but these are lines i will be repeating over and over. i like them.
dude, ever read something, then memorize it immediately, like without even trying????
kinda like "lips of marble, tears of aster"??
that's how it was when i first read Mearn's "as i was walking up the stair, i met a man who wasn't there..."
that's also how it was when i read "he lost himself inside my head...the inner child i thought was dead..." (u get the idea)
Mataachi, i hear you. it's still all in a jumble and i just put it down as it comes to me. But i feel you and your opinion helps me see it from a whole nother angle. Keep it comin.
Ink, where'd you go to at? We gotta hook up pretty soon and catch up. No one else gets my "whoopsy daisy" moments!
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